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Do either of us remember when we
first put chisel to stone?
Cracking and carving away at our hearts?
Yours was solid granite;
mine was closer to concrete.

I felt you watching me from across the room,
your eyes like lead weights on my heart,
compressing, squeezing out any doubt I had before.
I snatched your heart the moment I entered;
you brought mine to life.

The rocks around you heart
were already cracked with age.
Mine had been hardening since high school.
You cut through your barriers so easily;
I was a prisoner to my own fears.

Yet everyday as you take my hand,
I relive that wonderful moment:
When my bonds were cut and my soul given wings to fly,
when you whispered, "I love you", with your eyes
and with just a look pulled me back from darkness.

Not a day goes by when I'm not grateful
to have your smile by my side.
My days have turned spring green and bright,
not the dark and empty shell of my past.

So, when did we first take a chance at love and succeed?
I can't remember; all I see are your eyes.
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Yeah! More free verse! Okay, I am relatively happy with this one. Consider this my Christmas present to all of you hear on DA! Merry Christmas! Take a look and let's hear what you think!

NOTE: special thank you to :iconabandonedangel: for all your help this week. I don't know if I could ever have the confidence to write again if it wasn't for you. :hug:

And, to those who are curious, this isn't about anyone in particular. It could be...but it could not be! :D
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:D it could be...? ... well, good one poem :) i like your poems :cuddle:

thank you for this christmas present :hug:(i hope i do my own dA christmas present...)

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if something hadn't killed you, then it made you stronger.

try kill yourself and call you idiot, kill yourself and i will hate you.
good poem. i always enjoy reading your stories/poems, i would hate it if you stopped writing. (hug)
Awesome. Don't stop, keep it going. Let all of your feelings flow into a free verse and release your soul.

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When life gets tough, the tough get tougher
Muy bueno! You should be a lyricist!!! That'd be an awesome job for you. Taaah! You're too amazing. This poem kicked patootie. :D :hug:

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"The test of tolerance some when we are in a majority; the test of courage comes when we are in a minority."
Ralph W. Stockman
That's actually one of the carreers I'm looking into. I have actually written something else, but it's not finished. Thanks again for just reading my poems. :glomp:

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:wave:
I hope I never stop. Thanks so much again! :) :glomp:

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:wave:
Aww, thankee so much. :glomp: I do try really hard, and it's good to see my efforts bear fruit.

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You are very welcome. I hope it was to you liking and a good Christmas present.

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You're welcome! :D Bah! You're glomp didn't work. :( Poopers. :poo:

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"The test of tolerance some when we are in a majority; the test of courage comes when we are in a minority."
Ralph W. Stockman

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